   happiness   Good! I'm interested in your advice.     neutral   If I were you, I would change the beginning. You should write about your education first because we like to judge a man by his abilities.  
    happiness   Good idea, Betty. What would you think about the second part?     neutral   I think it's too short. You'd better say something about your work experience.  
    neutral   You're right, I'll change it. How about the last part?     happiness   
 Very nice. It sounds very personal. 
 Very well written. But there are one thing wrong-you didn ’ t put enough emphasis on